Thank youOriginally Posted by eclipse
I'll try again.
Determination and willingness to adapt is the way to success!
And I think there was something about cupcakes and syrup.. I think...
Thank you
Determination and willingness to adapt is the way to success!
And I think there was something about cupcakes and syrup.. I think...
I think i got it right this time. Had to change her name to suit her.
MUCH better!
now, though, you need to introduce both us, the readers, and yourself to the character!
Take a look at some of the accepted characters and see how much detail is usually put in, even though you are now on the right track, there is still stuff to be done! Her foalhood, her parents - the mods, and others too, would like to know about that. As well as her cutie mark - all you told us is that she got it, not really how.
But still, doing oh-so-so-so-much better!
One more thing, *Her Cutie mark is a lot like twilight's but spellbound's isn't under control. Most of the spells she tries either doesn't work or messes up. * - you will have to explain what you mean by that.
Last edited by User_16; 12-15-2012 at 02:09 PM.
Need to add background and personality. It's not like Spellbound just appeared out of nowhere with no personality whatsoever. There needs to be a backstory because Spellbound is just a normal pony, and there needs to be some sort of past. Personality is important, too. You don't want to make Spellbound all robotic, do you?
"And if I become a demon, so be it. I will endure the exile. Anything to protect her."
I think i got it done right hopefully the personality and background are detailed enough. Lol can't think of anything else for her lol. Was debating whether to name her spellbound or charmcaster. What do you guys think?
Getting better, but you need to make her a little weaker on the magic side. Nopony wants to be outshined by another, and the general rule is to stay away from the main characters level. For example, Firestrider (my OC) cannot use anymore fire than Chrysalis used at the end of Canterlot Wedding Pt 1. You also need to talk a little more about what her childhood was like, and what her specific talent is. If you want, take a look at Firestrider's post to get an idea of how you need to elaborate. You're getting closer, eclipse, just keep working at it and ask me anything you need to know.
"And if I become a demon, so be it. I will endure the exile. Anything to protect her."
Better?
Shoot she's awesomely cooler epic radical!
Rainbow dash swagger thanks! I've been trying so hard to make her work.
Be back soon going to facebook's pony creater app to try to make a picture of charmcaster for my profile picture.
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