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      Princess Dark Heart

      My first character!

      Name: Dark Heart

      Gender: Female

      Species: Pegasus

      Approximate age: (In human years) 18

      Picture and/or Description: myPony.jpg

      Background: Dark Heart claims to have worked with Luna. Remember when she "took" Celestia? This pegasus claims it was all her. She also says that she was the sister of the princesses and sometimes calls herself "Princess Dark Heart."

      Personality: She is mean, only friendly to the rich, and does NOT like to help ponies, she is very selfish and cares only for herself and the material things in a pony's life.

      Cutie Mark: (Be sure to include what their talent is and how it relates to the image that their Mark is. As well, how they learned what their talent is.) Dark Heart does not have a cutie mark. She says that she has one, but has painted over it-the real reason she doesn't have one is she has done nothing but stir up trouble-and that can't be counted as a cutie mark!

      Use: (Specify forum RP, shoutbox RP, or both) Both!

      Other: (Optional section, add anything else you feel important!)
      Last edited by Granny Smith; 09-01-2013 at 04:54 PM.

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      @Granny Smith
      Thank you for your submission!
      Unfortunately there are a few issues that we'd like to address.

      We unfortunately need you to change the design of the character. The mane/tail-style is used exclusively for the demigods that are Celestia and Luna ( and possible Twilight Sparkle ).

      While it is good that you include what she claims is her history, we would like you to give us a look at her real history. Tell us why she wishes to pretend to be a princess and why she wishes to pretend to be the evil one. Certainly there must be a reason for it?

      As for her personality, we think there will be an issue here. While your character may be able to RP at first, other ponies would very quickly start avoiding her if she is nothing but mean and selfish. She might make for a good one-adventure villain, but if you wish to remain in the RP for very long without being completely rejected and shunned, you need her to have at least some likable parts.

      The lack of a cutiemark is also an issue. Even the mean characters we have seen on the show; Diamond Tiara, Trixie and Nightmare Moon for examples, all have cutiemarks. As such it seems a bit strange that Dark Heart does not have one, and we have to insist that she is given a cutiemark.

      If you have any questions or comments, or want some help with the character, feel free to contact me and I'll see what I can do.
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      Oh I'm sorry I didn't know all those mistakes!! I will just start over.
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      Quote Originally Posted by Granny Smith View Post
      Oh I'm sorry I didn't know all those mistakes!! I will just start over.
      Nothing to worry about, I'm here to help! When you say start over, do you wish to edit the original character, or make an entirely new submission?
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      I just made a new submission, thanks!

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