Sorry about that. I added some more details, and was more careful in making sure it made sense this time. I also split the background into multiple paragraphs so that everything is in a place that makes sense in it. I hope it's all good this time!
Sorry about that. I added some more details, and was more careful in making sure it made sense this time. I also split the background into multiple paragraphs so that everything is in a place that makes sense in it. I hope it's all good this time!
Okay. What are Bones' actual flying capabilities? I know you say he failed his exam, but in a real-world sense, how often does he use his wings?
Expand out his storytelling cutie mark to actually tell a story. Try writing it in a way that tells us how he discovered his talent and earned his mark similar to how the Mane 6 recollected on their own stories in the show.
Overall, keep in mind that it's much better to explain things than just say they happened. That's the essence of RP in general!
I've majorly expanded on my cutie mark section and put a statement on how well Bones can fly. If there is anything else I need to do, let me know.
This still could use some more detail... hopefully you will come back and add more later. For now, accepted.
Thank you so much! I promise to update this whenever i can to make it perfect
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