Oc Hurricane

[Thunder Dash]

Name: Hurricane
Age: 16
Sex: Female
Info: Born in Ponyville be one of the fastest flyer next to rainbow dash. One her first race at age 5. She never fit in well the other pony her only friend was a small pony. She got her cutemark after she won her second race. He r cutiemark is shape like a hurricane colored black. Her mane is blue and black. Now she trying to make friends but she to sacred. She loves flying its been her dream to fly next to rainbow dash herself. Now she try to make new tricks. One thing she loves the most is her friend dusk. I hope u like it :o

[Twilight Sparkle]

Please resubmit this using the required OC format found stickied in this forum.

Additionally, when you do re-write this, the canon relations with Rainbow Dash will need to be removed.

[Captain Shekelstein]

Does he like pips?

[Thunder Dash]

Name:Hurricane
Age:16
Sex: Female
Bio: born in ponyville. When she was one that when u first learn how to fly and she never stoped. She very shy when it comes to making friends and meeting new people. But she loves to play will new people but she has to meet them first. She loves to fly she love the wind in her hair. She got her name because one day there was a bad hurricane but she learn how to push it in a different way and that's how she got her name.
Cutiemark: shape like a hurricane will lighting on the sides.
I hope u like it

[Candy Mane]

Hi I'm not a mod but I would suggest going through your submission and fixing various grammatical errors.

Good luck!

[NightrealmBrony]

Not a mod but just giving advice, your character is going to need detail, try writing it into a short story and talk about her childhood and explain how she got her cutie mark, just my 2 cents!

[Twilight Sparkle]

Please see my last thread's request, you are still not using the proper format.

We're looking for some real details here, don't expect an OC write-up to be done in 10 minutes.

[Thunder Dash]

Name:Hurricane
Age:16
Sex:Female
Species: Pegasus
Bio: born in ponyville. When she started School she didn't like it at first but then she meet her best friend Dusk. They were the outsider no one like them because that acted weird to them. But Dusk told her never listen to them keep pushing on no matter what they say. Her and Dusk spend all there time together whenever you find Hurricane you find Dusk. But one day they were on the playground and Dusk was not talking to her. She wonder what see did. Then she seen him being bully because he was hanging out will her so see when over there and fuss all of them out. Then one of them said that's way your weird. So hurricane ran away and hide in the woods. Of course Dusk when after her then he told her no matter what I'll be here for you. One day hurricane was walking thought the woods and the wind pick up and a branch from a tree hit her in the head and knock her out. She woke up and find herself inside a hurricane she try to fly out then she couldn't. Then she started hearing voices in her head and they were telling her she couldn't do it. Then she remember Dusk tell her never listen to what the say keep pushing on. Then she gained the power to fly out of that tornado and that's how she got here cutiemark. When she told Dusk he was so happy for her. So now she and Dusk live in ponyville the always fly together. She is very happy will her life and no matter what anyone says she knows that she better then that. And now the ponies that bully her they have nothing. She loves to read and run. She also loves meeting new people she can be shy but when u meet her she's a ball of energy. She has a blue and sliver mane and tail. Her body's white. She doesn't think she pretty. She not a girly girl but not a tom boy she in the middle of that. Her and Dusk see each other a lot but not little when they were little. She helps out will the weather. She has a great personality. She hates to see ponies bully other ponies it makes her thing of when she was little. She trys to end it and they all go back to being friends. She loves to do many things but she loves going into the wood at sunset and watch the sun fall and watch the moon rises.
Cutiemark: A torndao will lighting coming out the sides
I hope u like this one. Please like this one :o

[Reese]

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[Thunder Dash]

I edit it please read again