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    Thread: OC: Frostbite

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      OC: Frostbite

      Name: Frostbite

      Gender: Male

      Species: Unicorn

      Age: 23



      Background: Frostbite grew up in Ponyville along with his brother Firestrider, at a young age the two always butted heads, but didn't hold it against one another.
      At a young age he strived to find ways to help around the town, but without knowing his special talent he couldnt narrow it down. during the winter he spent most of
      his time outside in the snow, he enjoyed playing in the snow, making snowponies and such, one day while playing he got thinking and wanted to to work with the cold. It was at this point where he then set his sights on working hard to learn a frost spell, his parents always striving for him to do his best in the past were quite surprised in his new found obsession with learning a spell instead of his past when he was quite lazy and didn’t really do much to help out around the house as doing chores and such, so they both agreed to support him in anyway they could, if it was giving him extra allowance to buy new books or study materials, or urging him to do his best at it, when he would fail and almost give up.
      From then on he studied hard and between books and being outside all winter long. Around summer time during the heat of the day while standing under the shade of a tree he focused with all his will to cool the air around him, the feel of the cool winters breeze flowing through his mane, and then he felt the air around him cool, so cool the grass beneath his hooves was covered with frost, he was so excited he rushed to the towns cold storage and showed the other ponies what he could do by
      casting his spell and lowered the temperature to 23 degrees Fahrenheit. The cold storage workers decided that his talent would be helpful, and hired him in immeadiately. He very much prefers to work in cold storage of food for the other ponies. He enjoys his new found ability and works hard at a job he loves.

      Personality: Frostbite is kindly sarcastic, talkitive, and easy to get along with. He often times makes situations sound
      worse than they really are, but he means well. Frostbite really likes to show off sometimes, but he is also easily embarrassed.

      Cutie Mark: Frostbite earned his cuite mark when during the winter he was practicing spells in the snow and ice, when he wasn’t spending his time outside he was inside studying and hitting the books he would visit the library regularly and study any spell book he could find on casting ice spells, while it all seemed complex he studied hard, but he struggled with casting ice spells because of their complexity, many times he thought he was close, but he would fail, so he then set his sights on a lower form of an ice spell, which was a temperature spell. He studied hard and read books all winter long and by summer he then found he was able to lower the tempurature around him, he then recieved his mark, a snowflake.


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      Other: Frostbite's ice ability is very limited, he can only bring the tempurature 23 degrees Fahrenhiet, and can only affect a 10x10 square area, he is able to use some telekinesis
      with smaller objects, but nothing to heavy.
      Last edited by NightrealmBrony; 12-31-2012 at 06:56 PM.

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      Needs detail, overall.

      The disappearance of his brother, parents whom look down upon him, and an evil, icy demeanor don't sound like things which would be seen in My Little Pony. The fact that you explicitly state they caused grief worries me... this type of overdramatic depression is exactly what we want to avoid in the RP.

      Add a bit to his personality, that's the portion which truly develops the character!

      Write out the cutie mark story with detail, telling it much as the Mane 6 did in the show.

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      character has been revamped! sorry for the darkness!!

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      Nice!

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      Thanks for your updates!

      I discussed the ability to create ice with the other RP Staff members, and unfortunately we feel that it is not something that would be feasible for a magical skill.

      Perhaps you could create his talent regarding ice, just without the ability to actually formulate it from thin air. After all, pony magic is not typically elemental magic. Edit back!

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      Edits are done! hope this is up to par! lol

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      Hey there, @NightrealmBrony!

      Sorry about taking a few days to reply, I didn't notice you had updated. My apologies.

      I think you've got a decent idea here with the character, and the talent is different, but may work okay. You state a few different temperatures to which he can supposedly lower the area around him to, please specify just one. The cutie mark section could use a bit more detail as to the acquisition of knowledge to perform this spell... you say he needed to study and work, but nothing is shown of his practice or struggles. I'm trying to see what exactly his power will be used for in the RP as well, which you state somewhat vaguely. Please explain this a bit further for me, either by adding to the background section or writing that into the cutie mark story as well.

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      Edits are done!! sorry holidays are killer! lol

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      Please see the edits requested in my last post, they are still not as asked.

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      edits are done! sorry for the mix up!

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